Fill: Challenge #150 (DW/HP)

[shivver]

Context: https://archiveofourown.org/works/1282765/chapters/2656192

This is one of the first stories I ever wrote, back in 2014, and the first multi-chapter, a Doctor Who / Harry Potter crossover titled Mistaken Identity. It's a David Tennant doppleganger crossover, well, sorta - it capitalizes on the Doctor looking like Barty Crouch, rather than having Barty and the Doctor meet.

Back when I first posted it on ffnet, one of the comments, which has stuck with me all this time, was that it was a nice story, but it was too short, and that I should fill it in more. At the time, I thought that was crazy - why add words just to make it longer? However, after a few years, I happened to go back and read it and I understood what the commenter had really meant. The story had no meat - I skipped through descriptions and basically rushed through everything in my haste to produce a finished story. Also, on reread, I realized just how much years of writing practice had taught me as I winced at the horrible early writing.

I really need to rewrite Mistaken Identity (and my other longfic from that time, The Actor, which is surprisingly popular despite its horrible writing), but I know I never will. However, I decided to give it a bit of start for this challenge. Here's a new opening page.

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Fill-Challenge 150

[romanajo123]

 Okay,  I do like this idea since I play the what if game a lot after I post a thing.  So I have one (maybe two,,,) I'd revisit. 

First is this thing I did back in September.  archiveofourown.org/works/41444406

(Context is I did it for Fan-Flashworks and 100ships.  Inspired by a thing BMG posted.  Though I really do like the concept ! )

(I feel like I could've described things a little better -  like Charley's reaction to the Reveal .  E.g.  the way I have it is "what she saw next she'd never forget"  I could maybe have her gasp, or some other body language.  Since rule one is show don't tell.  And looking back at a little further, maybe go into more detail about their actual flight at the end.   I say they 'made circles and did tricks in the air' but I wonder if it would be better to actually have that happen.  And have something like- 

"Doctor, look!" Charley exclaimed,  as they passed a cluster of clouds.  " We're rather high up now, aren't we?" Turning her head a little to the left, Charley saw a large red-orange sphere starting to form in the sky.  "Is that...the moon?" 

"Well one of them" the Doctor explained,  doing his best to  manoeuvre around some curious birds.  "This planet actually has three moons. One each part of the day. " 

Charley stretched her arm wide. " I can almost touch it, gosh!" she said, a bit in awe and desperately trying hard to not look down and be reminded of exactly how high they were. 

Seond is a OUAT Christmas fic I posted not too long ago.  Honestly,  mainly I think there's parts I could've worded differently  or added onto. 

Challenge 151

[romanajo123]

 Winter can be an...odd time of the year.  Some days it can actually make you feel just so down/ depressed or just...meh.  (There's an actual word for this but I am not sure what it is) .  

Write a scene of your characters having what might be their worst day.  What happens ? Does the other characters comfort him or her? Or show the aftermath of that day-  i.e. just the after effects/ the comfort.