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Challenge #356
Jun. 5th, 2024 01:07 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
shivverToday's challenge is about not giving too much detail. In order to make something enjoyable to read, you shouldn't bog the reader down in details that they don't need; you should tell them just enough of that stuff so they know what's going on, and pay much more attention to the important bits.
As an example, you have two bicyclists side-by-side, and one of them drinks from his water bottle then tells the other about the doctor's diagnosis of his sister's condition. You shouldn't be describing how he unclips the bottle, pushes the button to extend the straw, sucks the water twice and swallows, etc., or have him repeat everything the doctor said. All you need is: He sucked a big gulp of water, then sighed. "It's cancer. Early stage. Probably curable. But cancer."
So.... today's challenge is to write a scene where one person is introducing another person to a temporary job, like welcoming in a new temp secretary, or a principal bringing in a substitute teacher, and is showing them the ropes - but write it with the reader and the story in mind, making sure to avoid too much detail and to make it feel like it's part of a bigger story and not just a thing written to fill a comm challenge.
As an example, you have two bicyclists side-by-side, and one of them drinks from his water bottle then tells the other about the doctor's diagnosis of his sister's condition. You shouldn't be describing how he unclips the bottle, pushes the button to extend the straw, sucks the water twice and swallows, etc., or have him repeat everything the doctor said. All you need is: He sucked a big gulp of water, then sighed. "It's cancer. Early stage. Probably curable. But cancer."
So.... today's challenge is to write a scene where one person is introducing another person to a temporary job, like welcoming in a new temp secretary, or a principal bringing in a substitute teacher, and is showing them the ropes - but write it with the reader and the story in mind, making sure to avoid too much detail and to make it feel like it's part of a bigger story and not just a thing written to fill a comm challenge.
