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Challenge #348
May. 13th, 2024 10:01 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
shivverLet's do a challenge along the lines of the last one I did. This will probably be easier using an existing scene from a show rather than making one up from scratch.
Write a scene where your character doesn't speak out loud but either makes a decision based on what's going on or comes up with an idea of how to solve the situation. Write it so that they directly express what they're seeing/thinking, rather than through narrator exposition. As an example:
Exposition:
She wondered what the Doctor was trying to hint. Usually when he rambled on, saying things that seemed to have no purpose, he was trying to tell her something without clueing other people in. Then she saw it, the lever that the sonic, clasped in his hand behind his back, pointed at. Now she had to figure out how to inch her way over to it without anyone noticing.
Direct thought:
She stared at the Doctor as he rambled on and on. Does he ever stop to breathe? she wondered, then forced herself to pay more attention. Usually when he's like this, he's trying to tell me something. So what is it? As he repeated another airy observation on the commander's political leverage, he flipped the sonic that was clasped in his hand behind his back, pointing it at a lever on the machine. There, that! Thank you, Doctor! Now, how do I get over there without being stopped?
A suggested scene for this is in "Human Nature", where Martha bursts into John's study, looks for and can't find the watch, and finally slaps him to try to get him to realize he's the Doctor.
Write a scene where your character doesn't speak out loud but either makes a decision based on what's going on or comes up with an idea of how to solve the situation. Write it so that they directly express what they're seeing/thinking, rather than through narrator exposition. As an example:
Exposition:
She wondered what the Doctor was trying to hint. Usually when he rambled on, saying things that seemed to have no purpose, he was trying to tell her something without clueing other people in. Then she saw it, the lever that the sonic, clasped in his hand behind his back, pointed at. Now she had to figure out how to inch her way over to it without anyone noticing.
Direct thought:
She stared at the Doctor as he rambled on and on. Does he ever stop to breathe? she wondered, then forced herself to pay more attention. Usually when he's like this, he's trying to tell me something. So what is it? As he repeated another airy observation on the commander's political leverage, he flipped the sonic that was clasped in his hand behind his back, pointing it at a lever on the machine. There, that! Thank you, Doctor! Now, how do I get over there without being stopped?
A suggested scene for this is in "Human Nature", where Martha bursts into John's study, looks for and can't find the watch, and finally slaps him to try to get him to realize he's the Doctor.