Challenge 262

[romanajo123]

 Write a scene where one character is trying to warn the other about something ( or indicate something or someone nearby). 

But they cannot use dialogue.  

Comments

[shivver]

You know, I'm just picturing the scene with Donna and the Doctor at opposite windows at Adipose Industries... (I wonder how that will be novelized - difficult thing to portray in text.)

[romanajo123]

Ha!! :P That's actually an excellent question. So , here's how it is in one Transcript I found.
[ Donna rises to look in through the door window. The Doctor also rises to look in through the window.

MISS FOSTER: Adipose. It's called an Adipose. Made out of living fat. Stripped from ordinary human...

The Doctor and Donna look at each other. Both are stunned by surprise.

DOCTOR (mouthing through the window): Donna?

DONNA (mouthing too): Doctor! !!

DOCTOR: But... what? Wha... What?!

DONNA: Oh my God!

DOCTOR: But... how?

DONNA: It's me!

DOCTOR: Well, I can see that!

DONNA: Oh this is brilliant!

DOCTOR: But what are you doing there?

DONNA: I was looking for you!

DOCTOR: What for?!

DONNA (miming): I, came here, trouble, read about it, internet, I thought, trouble = you! And this place is weird! Pills! So I hid. Back there. Crept along. Heard this lot. Looked. You! 'Cos they...

She gestures and looks toward Miss Foster. Who is staring at her. Just like Penny and the guards. Donna freezes.

MISS FOSTER (loud): Are we interrupting you? ] So maybe something like this?

[shivver]

Well, yeah, that's a transcript, but that's not what I'm talking about. How do you that scene in prose, describing what Donna is doing, get the message across, and preserve the comedic value? It's one of those things that really only works in video form. The transcript doesn't even do it justice - you find out what words Donna's trying to communicate (I actually didn't know all of it, just the meaning), but no one reading those words could actually picture what Catherine Tate was doing.