Challenge 276
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tenminutesadayThis is going to be about active voice/ passive voice.
Take a scene from someone else’s fic ( or, if you choose to , revisit an older work of your own) and read it. How can you make this sound more active? What kind of words could make this more effective ?
Here is an example you can use-
( DW)
“ It’s good when nice things happen. With the way the Doctor’s life goes, nice things are something to be grabbed onto when they happen. Because in five more minutes you could be running for your life from some terrible creature intent on destroying the universe, and you right along with it since you happen to be in the way.
No doubt there’ll be more running later, but now’s the time to make merry, to celebrate the Ponds’ big day. He couldn’t be there for the wedding, but he’ll make the most of the party food and dancing.
Dancing is good!
The End “
Take a scene from someone else’s fic ( or, if you choose to , revisit an older work of your own) and read it. How can you make this sound more active? What kind of words could make this more effective ?
Here is an example you can use-
( DW)
“ It’s good when nice things happen. With the way the Doctor’s life goes, nice things are something to be grabbed onto when they happen. Because in five more minutes you could be running for your life from some terrible creature intent on destroying the universe, and you right along with it since you happen to be in the way.
No doubt there’ll be more running later, but now’s the time to make merry, to celebrate the Ponds’ big day. He couldn’t be there for the wedding, but he’ll make the most of the party food and dancing.
Dancing is good!
The End “
