Challenge #75

[shivver]

There's always room for improvement, isn't there? For today's challenge, go back to something that you completed at least a year ago (and posted, if you're someone, like me, who posts stories to a journal or archive) that you've always thought about improving or rewriting, and do it! Just a couple of paragraphs is enough for this challenge - apply what you've learned in the time since you first wrote it.